Quantum Raiders Forum

[DoubtlessOne]

The art of the act
goes hand to feet
If ever it were to hit
then the end is what you meet

The signiture of the leg
is what man has always had
but to the victim, oh how
it is when his time goes bad

So if you are the victim
to the witness, it squeels like a mouse
so then it is when
you saw the ROUND HOUSE


the title is pretty obvious

COMMENTS!

[re^flex]

Decent

[David]

ill say it needs some work

not every verse have to rhyme, example

You came into my life unexpectedly,
and everything took a turn for the better.
Your warm eyes, your laugh,
the sincere way you speak,
and the kindness you showed me,
all became a part of my life.

As you unfolded yourself to me,
I discovered more and more beauty.
I have never seen so much
gentleness in one person.
Without even knowing it,
you were slowly making a place
for yourself in my heart.

It used to seem so hard at times
to feel so close in a relationship.
But it’s so easy to feel close to you.
I can’t tell you how nice that feels.
I realize now that I had never known
what it meant to be loved
until I was loved by you.

theres a poem about the stage before sex(yeah i like to call it that)

No i didnt write it i just took it off some love poem 81 web.

=D anyway im in a poetry club in school now ill write some samples next thursday(club meeting day lol)

[Dridoz]

Now this is lame....so feel free to tell me how sucky it is:

I love my PS2
Playing it is the only thing I do
I don't even go to the loo
Why don't you join me too?

Playing it all day
Its just so fun to play
It makes you feel so gay
Come and join me I'll say!

But now my grades went down
So low underneath the ground
I feel like a clown
And the the only thing i do is frown

Now I hate my PS2
Studying is the only thing I do
To get my marks higher than two
Help me,will you?

Now if somebody would be willing to post some metaphor's,alliteration,personification's or onomatopoeia's that would be great

[Zidane]

It makes you feel so gay

ROFL

[Mune]

I could try my hand at it...

Those who has seen the light died
I have not seen it yet

Those who has seen the light died
My family dissapeared after that

Those who has seen the light died
I can never enter the city again

Those who has seen the light died
It was The atomic bomb

[David]

heres a poem from me

"Dear"

It's been two years since we met,
Not a word has been spoken.

It's been two years since we kissed,
Not a sign of love from you.

It's been two years since you held me,
Not a sign of you wanting my body.

It's been two years since you smiled,
Not a sign of happiness was shown.

yay wasnt that crappy?

[DoubtlessOne]

This is what I wish sometimes

It's the night when I thought
It's the day of the sun when I saw
If only I could dream what I can say
but you were too much to awe

Dearest girl of the dream
better the girl that I have seen
If I could, then I would
just tell you what I mean

If I can, then I am
the man whom you just met
if you try, but tell a lie
I am not for you just yet

I will ask you when the time is right
but now isn't when it's to shine
It'll be when I can tell
that on Valentines, that you are mine

oh man am I on drugs?

[Bunny]

here's limrick

Holy crap!
two girls walk
and they talk
all they do is yap, yap yap!

im not very good at ryhming...very nice poems guys! its better that i can do! and i my class tlaks alot and im teh only one without one of my best friends in the same class(some of thme have am class and i have pm)

[kirkryan]

here goes my O's

oh my god you guys are lame
and this topic too
so pls close this or i will headshot you
dridoz feels gay when playing ps2?
guess what?
he uses the controller as a dildo

and doubtless lied about his wish people
he wish everyday he gets a whole pickle
what he want to do with it?
stick it in his asshole

[Elk]

here goes my O's

oh my god you guys are lame
and this topic  too
so pls close this or i will headshot you
dridoz feels gay when playing ps2?
guess what?
he uses the controller as a dildo

and doubtless lied about his wish people
he wish everyday he gets a whole pickle
what he want to do with it?
stick it in his asshole

and... you didn't feel like and idiot when typing this?




worthless fodder is all i see...
cept for Dridoz feels gay while playing ps2? line
that cracked me up...

[kirkryan]

here goes my O's

oh my god you guys are lame
and this topic  too
so pls close this or i will headshot you
dridoz feels gay when playing ps2?
guess what?
he uses the controller as a dildo

and doubtless lied about his wish people
he wish everyday he gets a whole pickle
what he want to do with it?
stick it in his asshole

and... you didn't feel like and idiot when typing this?




worthless fodder is all i see...
cept for Dridoz feels gay while playing ps2? line
that cracked me up...

nah i was bored qro forums is the last place for me if im bored

[DoubtlessOne]

thanks REALLY for the comment Kirk
it was really uncalled for

[Lucidmaddness]

You guys think that poetry is all about analogys, but its really about choice of verbs and the TONE of the poem. I just wrote this one...


A small drop of sanity slithers from my consciousness,
Moping around the damp emptiness of my mind,
A soft voice whispers into my ear and my world goes black.
Roaming in the destruction, my soul gathers what is left of me and thrusts itself into the abyss I no longer know,
I realize what has come over me,
And I gasp you with what hope I have left in me…
I slowly fall to the floor,
Becoming what the me I once was before you.


~lucid


And for you idiots who think "gay" means he is homosexual, if you look it up in the dictionary, you will also find that it means "happy"

[DoubtlessOne]

You guys think that poetry is all about analogys, but its really about choice of verbs and the TONE of the poem. I just wrote this one...


A small drop of sanity slithers from my consciousness,
Moping around the damp emptiness of my mind,
A soft voice whispers into my ear and my world goes black.
Roaming in the destruction, my soul gathers what is left of me and thrusts itself into the abyss I no longer know,
I realize what has come over me,
And I gasp you with what hope I have left in me…
I slowly fall to the floor,
Becoming what the me I once was before you.


~lucid


And for you idiots who think "gay" means he is homosexual, if you look it up in the dictionary, you will also find that it means "happy"

hence they reason in the 1970's they realized that the "gay" people were actually homosexual, and gave us a new breakthrough the asshole which we now call AIDS

thank you all *bows and curtains close*

[Dridoz]

I told you i suck! and yeah the gay i meant was happy..